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January 17, 2008
a place within
closed away from scrutiny
from the world
angry at the wind
at the rain
at daylight
angry at your smile
at the sound of your voice
angry at it all
this is where I live
and how
you come
like a void
false journey-mate
embossed with promises
a coat of synthetic
edges peeled back
its leatherlessness
revealed
shivering
I wrap it round me
seeking warmth
but it is not supple
ill-fitted
it does not hold my form
you do not remember
the bend of my arm
nor the silk
that slid
slippery underfoot
on the marble aisle
as we stalked love
and the vain promise
it would be constant
as the wind
as the rain
as daylight
Nice work. It sounds professional. The words “Fellow Travelers” sure inspired us differently. Thanks for reading mine.
this was such a unique take on the prompt – very nice.
“as the wind
as the rain
as daylight”..superb!
Nature is the once constant we can be sure of. Love how you showed this!
Wow! ‘embossed with promise’ is incredibly fine. Beautiful poem! Your banner is superb, as well.
a very different but great take on the prompt..
leveller
Nice to read something so totally different. Great piece.
I love this poem. Love is after all where fellow travellers roam. Glad I read your poem.
Thank you Shari.
WDS
Thank you UL. That triplet is the key refrain.
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Thank you Linda.
WDS
Thank you for the double compliment, Tumblewords. I have always found the sea’s distant horizon hypnotic and spiritual, in an eternal context.
WDS
Thank you Gautami.
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Thank you Keith, very much.
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Thank you John.
WDS
this unfolded so beautifully…
Fabulous banner. Evocative poem — I really like the simplicity of it, which gives it much power:
angry at the wind
at the rain
at daylight
angry at your smile
at the sound of your voice
angry at it all
this is where I live
and how