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October 20, 2008stopping is no option
to lose the way
is to keep
going
keep moving
forward
lest one
atrophies
grows rigid
with
the rigor mortis
of apathy
stiff
with unbending
ignorance
fear
paralyzed
gawking inward
at hopelessness
at failure
the
giving in
the giving up
the rot
that sets in
with
the loss of wonder
when grip lets go
of dreams
of possibility
arthritic loss of faith
debilitates
the soul
cripples
the manifest light
that shines forth
at the leap
into darkness
into uncertainty
into the sacred unknown
frozen
is the cautious man
withered in
a worried cage
terrified
of the wrong step
of
the journey all in
of daring the way
unmarked
and thus
bleeds out
the color of life
of living
to become cold
grey
a putrefied husk
of
brittled remorse
mired in
regret
for never having
shone so brightly
as to blind
the eyes of death
stopping is no option




I like the way that ’stopping is no option’ sandwiches the message. I found ‘the dream’ a bit scary.
Well written!
Dear Rob,
Thank you for sharing your poetry with me. While both touched me deeply, I resonated with your poem, stopping is no option.
I especially loved “frozen is the cautious man, mired in a worried cage.” Whew…
This makes so much sense! Beautiful lines in here! I expecially like
“frozen
is the cautious man
withered in
a worried cage.”
A strong message to those who lack determination, question motives, or rue their unfulfilled ambitions.
A deep and insightful poem. And the message is strong.
One of the reasons I love ekphrastic poetry is the very different lenses through which the same image can be seen. I didn’t write to this one, but I remember my impression of this image being very different from what you’ve laid out here.
I see that others have pulled out the same lines I will, but these are the lines I most enjoyed (beautiful sound and rhythm):
“frozen
is the cautious man
withered in
a worried cage”
An appropriately breathless style takes the reader along without a pause from start to the outstanding final line. Nice work!
Great lines. This is one of my favorites:
the rot
that sets in
with
the loss of wonder
To be “terrified of the wrong step” is indeed to be “frozen.” Nicely done.
Keep dreaming, hold on to the wonder that is the world, and keep juggling the words that fall so beautiful to eye, era and mouth from your pen.
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