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January 17, 2008

 

a place within
closed away from scrutiny
from the world

angry at the wind
at the rain
at daylight

angry at your smile
at the sound of your voice

angry at it all

this is where I live
and how

you come
like a void
false journey-mate

embossed with promises

a coat of synthetic
edges peeled back
its leatherlessness
revealed

shivering
I wrap it round me
seeking warmth

but it is not supple

ill-fitted
it does not hold my form

you do not remember
the bend of my arm

nor the silk
that slid
slippery underfoot
on the marble aisle

as we stalked love
and the vain promise
it would be constant

as the wind
as the rain
as daylight

 

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17 comments

  1. Nice work. It sounds professional. The words “Fellow Travelers” sure inspired us differently. Thanks for reading mine.


  2. this was such a unique take on the prompt – very nice.

    “as the wind
    as the rain
    as daylight”..superb!


  3. Nature is the once constant we can be sure of. Love how you showed this!


  4. Wow! ’embossed with promise’ is incredibly fine. Beautiful poem! Your banner is superb, as well.


  5. a very different but great take on the prompt..

    leveller


  6. Nice to read something so totally different. Great piece.


  7. I love this poem. Love is after all where fellow travellers roam. Glad I read your poem.


  8. Thank you Shari.

    WDS


  9. Thank you UL. That triplet is the key refrain.

    WDS


  10. Thank you Linda.

    WDS


  11. Thank you for the double compliment, Tumblewords. I have always found the sea’s distant horizon hypnotic and spiritual, in an eternal context.

    WDS


  12. Thank you Gautami.

    WDS


  13. Thank you Keith, very much.

    WDS


  14. Thank you John.

    WDS


  15. this unfolded so beautifully…


  16. Fabulous banner. Evocative poem — I really like the simplicity of it, which gives it much power:

    angry at the wind
    at the rain
    at daylight

    angry at your smile
    at the sound of your voice

    angry at it all

    this is where I live
    and how


  17. Came across these lines by chance. Inspiring.



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