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April 6, 2008
my eyes
crisp
from the
day’s
sun
from
devastation’s
fires
from
cruel vision
of
relentless
horror
scorched
by
vicious
awareness
of
sentenced
gaze
take refuge
in this
heavy
late evening
dew
settling
like a
shroud
diaphanous
opaque
obscuring
I am
sustained
by this
damp
cool
pall
that
descends
upon me
wraps ‘round
my
pained
countenance
fevered
with fatigue
crippled
with despair
driven
by a
faint
memory
of honor
of duty
of
human dignity
I
stumble
broken
by
this sin
I
shoulder
this
perversion
not of
my
making
but
of my
charge
my sin
conceived
and
unleashed
by those
who
would
impose
their will
their
twisted
utopic vision
who would
advance
their agenda
of
domination
those
who
would
take it
all
who would
rule
the world
a world
now
broken
corrupted
by their
vision
spoiled
by their
vanity
a world
in
chaos
I have
but
this
bloodied
ruin-riddled
highway
of
deepening
nocturne
of
dying
dreams
crushed
innocence
destruction
death
of my
duplicity
of my
guilt
of
burdened
shame
and so
I
stumble on
saturated
with
this
falling evening
with
this
drenching sorrow
slinking
in
exhausting
alert
hollow
empty
into this
coming
night
and
the
next night
and
the night
that
follows
that always
follows
captive
on this
road
of
murder
of
mounting evil
of
brutal
human
arrogance
prisoner
of
this
lost highway
seeking
forgiveness
damn… you did it again.. this is freaking amazing… i read it out loud and … damn… that is all i can say……
by paisley April 6, 2008 at 4:23 pmwow this was a very powerful read. Wonderful.
by jadey April 7, 2008 at 7:52 amstirring work – thoughtful – I particularly picked upon the road to disaster – nice work!!
by Tumblewords April 7, 2008 at 11:12 am“not of my making, but of my charge….of brutal human arrogance, prisoner of this lost highway, seeking forgiveness.” if this does not say it all.
i have no words for this except it was incredible. i felt the pain, the sorrow, the guilt, the anger…
i’ve often wanted to pen something that would properly do justice the emotion of the soldiers fighting this war…yet no proper words ever came.
after reading this, it is quite evident that i will not be able to surpass nor even write it just as well….this was excellent.
by rebecca April 7, 2008 at 1:52 pmA post full of a passionate fear.
by anthonynorth April 11, 2008 at 6:42 amExcellent.
All of our fears – but felt more lightly in our comfortable homes than the fear of the narrator. All of our guilt in submitting to such tyranny – but felt more lightly because we have not had to pull the trigger. Am I interpreting this correctly? At any rate, it is powerful poetry.
by Granny Smith April 11, 2008 at 11:11 amWooo This almost reads like ongoing blasts from a gun.
Absolutely dynamic!
Gemma
by Gemma Wiseman April 11, 2008 at 7:56 pmAwesome read! Thanks.
shapely ghosts
by gautami tripathy April 11, 2008 at 9:25 pmexquisite writing, dark and human filled with our deep madness –thank you
by Amarettogirl April 13, 2008 at 6:31 amI can’t imagine what the soldiers over there are feeling… yet, your poem speaks for them so eloquently.
by Regina Clare Jane April 14, 2008 at 8:11 amBravo…
I like how these voices are so literally “shoved to the side”. thanks-
by renkat April 26, 2008 at 7:41 amI appreciated the descending lines of feelings resulting from being associated with such happenings.
Powerful, soul rendering, and moving.
by Melissa July 26, 2008 at 1:57 pmAs a previous commenter said, this feels like a machine gun firing the bullets of brutality into the soft skin of the reader. That is a testament to the success of this piece. Well written!
by Pen Me A Poem July 27, 2008 at 2:16 ampowerful words, brutal as they are real, provoking an ache inside which one could not shed off even with heavy tears
by lissa July 30, 2008 at 5:47 ami do not have the words to describe how amazing this is…
by jorc709 July 31, 2008 at 5:29 amThis is a powerful write. The last line is my favorite.
by rio July 31, 2008 at 7:24 amMinimalist mode invokes the bitternee of the soldier’s plight. “Prisoner of this lost highway seeking forgiveness” is a powerful description of man’s fated warrior mindset and a magnificiently wise quote to be quoted often. Thank-you.
by Jane Jones March 10, 2010 at 8:03 pm