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January 26, 2008
distant
slurred
reverberant
like a voice
in a canyon
I hear her calling
in my mind
my name
rolling
sweet as nectar
from lips
soft
as orchid petals
full
as a bursting peach
glistening
deep coral
as they wrapped
softly
‘round each
pouted syllable
when she bid me
tender farewell
so long ago
our fingertips
had strained
to grasp
until
the final sensation
of warmth
of touch
had faded
and they had
drifted apart
I had struggled
to tear my eyes
from her
tears
that glistened
on her lashes
and around
her swollen
crystal blues
to slip softly
over the crests
of her velvet
cheeks
then
down the contour
of her face
flushed as sunset
to lightly salt
her quivering lips
and
as I passed
numb and dazed
through the tunnel
of the
loading gate
toward the jet
that took me
to hell
I had
at that moment
locked the image
of that sorrowed
face of love
deep in my heart
It had proved
my salvation
my only grasp
on sanity
in those
horrific years
my lips
too
had quivered
on that day
with the sting
of separation
and the chilling
knowledge
I would
soon taste
the bitter blood
of war
foul with the
stench of death
having not yet
departed
I had already
longed
to gaze again
into her
brilliant blue eyes
and taste
her sweetness
yet
as I return
this day
trying to face
reality from
30,000 feet
I taste the salt
of sadness
for I fear
a kiss
from me
with my killer’s
mouth
will forever defile
the fragile innocence
of those
luscious lips
soft
as orchid petals
full
as a bursting peach
that glistened
and quivered
when last we parted
That is such a powerful yet gentle piece.
Your words ‘a kiss from me…with my killers mouth’ are inspired.
by keith hillman February 2, 2008 at 8:56 amI loved the first three lines: distant/slurred/reverberant
by The Literary Prostitute February 2, 2008 at 9:49 amThe reality of this is couched in visuals that rock the soul.
by Tumblewords February 2, 2008 at 10:57 amholy christ,,, that was awe inspiring… what a moving piece….
by whypaisley February 2, 2008 at 7:04 pmVery good visuals..
fouled up, have you?
by gautami tripathy February 3, 2008 at 6:59 amWOW… your format definitely added to the sound and sight of each line .. with my killer’s mouth .. i wonder if this conveys the emotions others have gone thru upon their return..
by pieceofpie February 6, 2008 at 12:51 pmoh i liked this much…felt very real. thank you
by UL February 6, 2008 at 4:19 pmTaking your first human life changes you forever.
by winedarksea February 7, 2008 at 4:05 pmGave me goose bumps.
Well done.
Robin of mytwoblessings
by Robin February 8, 2008 at 9:40 amThis is truly awesome and so sad. Especially after reading your comment and fully comprehending your meaning. Very powerful words and images. My heart goes out to you.
by Shirley February 8, 2008 at 10:06 amI too like the first stanza. That reverberates!
endless possibilities
by gautami February 8, 2008 at 10:39 amone word: brilliant.
enough said.
by rebecca February 8, 2008 at 10:46 amThat’s very moving.
by Susan Helene Gottfried February 8, 2008 at 10:51 amAn excellent treatment. Sensual. Moving.
by AnthonyNorth February 8, 2008 at 3:54 pmFrom the Odyssey ’til now; from the myths to reality. Nicely done.
by Richard February 8, 2008 at 5:23 pmsome words that were used, is like printed on my mind right now.. just making me think more and more..lovely piece.
by Rambler February 11, 2008 at 7:41 amWow, that was incredibly powerful and moving. Beautiful.
by Karina February 12, 2008 at 7:14 pmYour emotions took form with your words aptly chosen creating rich imagery in the mind – your emotions are tangible in the mind’s senses! Great work! Please check out my series poem: Changes
I wish you well.
~ Jeques
by jeques February 13, 2008 at 10:30 pm